Without further adue here is Chapters.
CHAPTERS.
A sunny afternoon.
A girl shaped like a wave, licks an almond flake from her hand. It is the last one and therefore the most unique. The one she will remember. She hesitates to put it over her lips. She lays back in the sun. The sound of the waves in her ear.
By the bus stop.
A boy who feels like the wind waits at the bus stop. He feels like the wind today as he did yesterday, but he did not tell anyone this. This is his own hidden secret. It whispers over the wind. It is not a happy secret. The boy hides underneath a hood. He hides from the wind and at the same time he feels like it. His heart is confused. A small tear floats out of his eye and down onto the road. It stays there and then the wind comes and carries it away.
twilight.
It is spring today and the man is buying a pink flower for his sweet heart. It smells very nice. Today is a peaceful day for him. It is a day when the leaves do not blow. It is a day where the sun hides in the grass. It is a day when his world smiles as he walks past it. It is a day when all the world could fit inside of him packed tightly inside his suitcase.
notes from the inside.
See the crumpled and torn manuscript that sways so forlornly as it is carried through the breeze. Did you ever care to follow its trajectory, see the way it reflects the light off its brown surface on its journey. The strange miracles it encounters floating over and above us drifting as only it can, at last free from itself.
I love the rhythm of this, it is quite soothing. And everytime I re-read it it, i gain another insight into the characters, or at least an indication of what a possible insight might be.
ReplyDeleteThe idea of chapters I find incredibly effective, as I pick up chapters on many levels...chapters of life, chapters of the individuals life, chapters of the day, and then the chapters of a book as the structure and spacing indicates.
An interesting thought provoking piece...you should do a follow up...Chapter 2?
Could turn into an epic poem, or short story even. Building on characters can be fun.
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thanks Amy I hadn't even considered it to tell the truth that is writing a sequel, but it's an intriguing idea.
ReplyDeleteThanks for your comment! Haha so excited it is officially my first. So thank you very much.
i shall post more comments later this week, been reading quite a few of your pieces =)
ReplyDeletealso, this just caught my eye at the bottom of the page...
When a boy of 5
I learnt to tell a good lie called poetry
how very interesting! I never thought of poetry as a "lie". i shall ponder on this for a while and get back to you. What is it you mea by this?
Well it's actually meant to be a haiku but when I posted it online it didn't post properly,but I think what I was getting at was poetry is so much about imagination. It isn't limited by what's real or what's true (although you can argue what truth is till the cows come home). It's that idea of playing with the truth of things I think. I think it's also playing on the idea of being "good". Poetry is so subjective that the idea of a good poem, is perhaps in itself a conceit.
ReplyDeleteAnyway this is how the haiku should have looked:
when a boy of 5
I learnt to tell a good lie
called poetry